2013年6月6日雅思寫作解析

2013年6月6日雅思寫作解析
　　圖表類型:餅狀圖
　　作文題目:Two pie charts give information about energy forms used in Australia in 2008 and a prediction for 2030.
　　寫作要點(diǎn)：
　　可以參考C7T4(同為 energy 相關(guān)內(nèi)容)和C9T3(同為過去和將來兩個(gè)時(shí)間點(diǎn))
　　
　　注意：
　　1.總體 overview 的寫作,比如 traditional fossil fuels were and will remain to be major choices
　　2.注意大小描述和上升下降描述的結(jié)合，同時(shí)要體現(xiàn)出對(duì)比
　　3.注意時(shí)態(tài)的應(yīng)用

　　出現(xiàn)頻率分析
　　餅圖一月份出現(xiàn)兩次:1月5日和1月19日。之后只有在3月2日出現(xiàn)過一次。下半年再考到的可能性會(huì)加大。

　　2013年6月6日A類雅思大作文解析
　　作文題目：It is a government’s responsibility to provide financial support to old people after they retire or individuals should save money for themselves.
　　提問方式: Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
　　題材類別: 政府、老齡化
　　舊題回顧：老齡化問題近三年體現(xiàn)出了一年一考的特征
　　2012.03.10 There is a higher proportion of older people than younger people.
　　Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
　　2011.10.08 Around the world, the proportion of the elderly people is increasing constantly. To what extent do you agree that it brings more positive effects than negative effects?

　　2010.03.06 老齡化對(duì) individuals 和 society 有什么影響
　　2008.06.28 With technology speeding up, more and more young people begin to use mobile phones and the Internet, but old people have little chance to be exposed to them. What ways could mobile phone and the Internet be useful to old people? How do old people be encouraged to use this new technology?
　　寫作思路分析：該題目看似只是寫老齡化的問題，但是和政府結(jié)合在一起之后，其實(shí)并不好寫。首先學(xué)生在論證時(shí)最好涉及到政府 financial support 相關(guān)的詞匯，否則會(huì)寫得過于general。 其次，國內(nèi)的養(yǎng)老和國外的養(yǎng)老其實(shí)又有所差異，所以國內(nèi)考生如何表達(dá)清楚觀點(diǎn)也是一個(gè)小難點(diǎn)。
　　參考文章結(jié)構(gòu)安排：
　　第一段：開頭段-補(bǔ)充背景，轉(zhuǎn)述話題一方：政府需要提供 financial support
　　1、政府有職責(zé)服務(wù)公眾，特別老年人這一類的“弱勢(shì)群體”
　　2、老年人對(duì)于社會(huì)有貢獻(xiàn)，理應(yīng)獲得相應(yīng)的“回報(bào)”
　　另一方：個(gè)人需要有積蓄
　　1、政府的幫助對(duì)象太多，可能負(fù)擔(dān)過重，個(gè)人應(yīng)當(dāng)有所分擔(dān)
　　2、個(gè)人一定的積蓄可以降低風(fēng)險(xiǎn)，而不至于完全依賴于社會(huì)
　　3、可以幫助個(gè)人形成一定程度上的節(jié)儉

　　結(jié)尾立場(chǎng)：兩者都需要,priority可以視不同類型的國家而定
　　參考范文：
　　Majority of human beings have been blessed by the peace and prosperityafter Second World War which in turn has brought about the booming ofpopulation. Not only has the number of people been rising dramatically, life expectancyin most countries has also witnessed noticeable increases. That, however, poses dire challenge of how tosupport the aging population.
     Those who call for financial support from state or municipal government harbor the perception that “government by the people should indeed serve the people”,especially disadvantaged ones like the elderly. Education for the children and employment opportunities for the young are among statesmen’s top priorities, yet equally important is the need of the senior ones who appear comparatively senile now but may have devoted all their life to the society, be it agriculture and industrial production or the making of policies or laws.
     Opponents, in contrast, are concerned about whether the huge number of elderly people might have become “unbearable heaviness” for the whole society. Pension for an increasing number of retired workers could amount to astronomical figures, which is unlikely to be alleviated in the future due to the fact that many now will keep drawing the pension for more than twenty years. Besides, the fund spent on areas like constructing nursing houses for lonely aged people could add to the burden. Under such circumstances, individuals should take part of the responsibility by saving a certain proportion of their income before retirement or trying to stay in their position slightly longer if their health permits.
     Personally, I would say government and individuals are never independent of each other, so confronting the challenging of an aging society calls for efforts from both sides. However, the priority might differ in various countries: while the developing countries need to invest more on improving the pension or overall welfare system, individuals who are enjoying the benefits in developed countries should try to save money for themselves so as to share the pressure of their governments.

　　詞匯拓展：
　　Pension 養(yǎng)老金
　　Nursing houses 養(yǎng)老院
　　Booming of population 人口增長
　　welfare system 福利體系
　　peace and prosperity 和平與繁榮
　　municipal government 市政府
　　disadvantaged people 弱勢(shì)群體