雅思寫作當(dāng)中段落如何展開？

雅思寫作是很多同學(xué)們都在頭疼的部分，詞匯量、語法、文章框架結(jié)構(gòu)都是難題，本期新通教育寫作老師白媛為同學(xué)們分享如何展段落。

這一節(jié)， 我們主要講解寫作中間段落展開的思路。中間段落展開時(shí)我們整個(gè)課程體系中最核心的部分，也是學(xué)生問題最多的部分。今天我們就通過一篇學(xué)生的作文來講解一下如何可以讓我們中間段落的內(nèi)容比較扣題。這篇作文的題目如下：

Nowadays, distance-learning programs are such a common thing for us, but some people argue that they’re not as good as those attended in a college or university by people in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

我們在這里只展示學(xué)生的中間兩個(gè)段落，我們看看學(xué)生的這兩段有什么內(nèi)容上的問題。

It is unquestionable that the extensive use of distance-learning is beneficial to broadening your knowledge as this learning method can enable people to overcome the geographic barriers. Above all, there are many teachers who are granted as first-class teacher in distance learning programs. Compared with normal teachers, these teachers are backbones of cultivating talents and are helpful for students to improve the grades and learning ability obviously. Moreover, the students won’t be embarrassed when they ask questions for teachers. This means that scholars can share knowledge and ideas in different areas of studies. The students don’t worry about making fun of their questions because they surf the internet for studying rather than face to face.

從這個(gè)段落我們可以看出來本段的topic sentence中降到了遠(yuǎn)程教學(xué)可以幫助學(xué)生克服地理限制去獲得知識。那我們本段的重點(diǎn)就應(yīng)該房子這里，告訴我們學(xué)生有什么地理限制，造成了什么問題，有了遠(yuǎn)程教學(xué)之后，怎么幫助我們解決這個(gè)問題的。學(xué)生分了兩個(gè)點(diǎn)去寫， 但是第一部分只有好老師是怎樣的，完全沒有回答我們這幾個(gè)問題，所以段落內(nèi)容應(yīng)該增添農(nóng)村孩子不能享受到這么好的教師的講課，可以有了遠(yuǎn)程教學(xué)之后，即使在農(nóng)村，也可以接觸到這些課程。這樣我們才能把這個(gè)段落的內(nèi)容交代清楚，要不然督導(dǎo)這里會有云里霧里的感覺。

學(xué)生還又用了另外一個(gè)點(diǎn)來解釋，主要講遠(yuǎn)程學(xué)生提問不會尷尬，這個(gè)其實(shí)在我們的這段的主題句中不能包含，所以要不去掉，要不稍微改動(dòng)我們的主題句，加進(jìn)去這部分的內(nèi)容。

In addition, the dominance of distance-learning can help people have a flexible timetable according to their time. For example, these distance education courses are available 24 hours a day. When the students meet trouble, they can click the pause button and replay the video until they fully understand the content. What is more important is that students who are from rural area have the same chance to study.

而這一段內(nèi)容的前半部分還不錯(cuò)，就是在講解怎么更靈活的學(xué)習(xí)了。然后后半部分，也就是最后一句在講解對于農(nóng)村的孩子來說，有了一樣的學(xué)習(xí)機(jī)會，這個(gè)跟本段的內(nèi)容無關(guān)，跟上段的內(nèi)容重復(fù)，所以可以直接刪掉。

就給同學(xué)們分享到這里，如果同學(xué)們對雅思考試感興趣，或者想通過來提升自己的英語應(yīng)用能力，，我們的老師會為同學(xué)們推薦合適的成績。

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