2014年7月19日雅思寫(xiě)作解析以及原創(chuàng)范文

7月19日雅思大作文回憶：健康類(lèi)(遺漏話(huà)題)

Some people believe that the government have the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet，while others believe that it is individuals' responsibility to care for their diet and health?Discuss both sides and give your opinion?有人認(rèn)為政府有責(zé)任保障公民有健康飲食，有人認(rèn)為個(gè)人有責(zé)任關(guān)注個(gè)人飲食和健康，討論兩種觀點(diǎn)，給出你的意見(jiàn)?

點(diǎn)評(píng)：托福也有討論兩種觀點(diǎn)的提問(wèn)

思路拓展：

1. 政府加強(qiáng)對(duì)于食品安全的監(jiān)管力度

2. 政府加強(qiáng)教育，提高民眾的健康飲食的意識(shí)

3. 個(gè)人提高健康飲食的意識(shí)：多吃水果蔬菜，避免過(guò)度的糖分，脂肪，熱量的攝入

4. 個(gè)人養(yǎng)成規(guī)律的每日鍛煉的習(xí)慣，增強(qiáng)自己的免疫力;愉悅心情;緩解壓力

主題觀點(diǎn)：政府和個(gè)人應(yīng)該是協(xié)同努力，最重要的責(zé)任在于個(gè)人

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原創(chuàng)范文：

首段：背景介紹 + 作家立場(chǎng)：

To lead a wholesome and active life might be the dream of every individual, unfortunately, busy pace of modern life sometimes deprives us of personal health. Happiness lies, first of all, in health. Health enables us to brave career challenges and harmonize family life. This essay aims to prove that a healthy diet derives from the efforts made by the government and everyone：

二段：談及政府如何保障人們的健康飲食

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TV commercials and various ads are the underlying reasons of unhealthy dietary habit. After watching different vivid food ads on fast-foods, fried foods and carbonated beverage, unwise consumers will unavoidably be swayed by those negative propagandas. Imaginably, too much eating of cheese, ice cream, salty snacks and meat is physically detrimental. By that I mean, obesity or over-nutrition are now agonizing many families. Hence, it is the unshakable obligation of the government to ensure its citizens’ health. To illustrate, American government had formulated policies restricting the bundle sales of fast foods aiming at children. New Zealand government had enacted legislations imposing a heavy tax upon alcohol buyers and cigarette purchasers.

點(diǎn)評(píng)：American government had formulated policies restricting the bundle sales of fast foods aiming at children. 美國(guó)政府立法禁止銷(xiāo)售針兒童捆綁銷(xiāo)售快餐

點(diǎn)評(píng)：New Zealand government had enacted legislations imposing a heavy tax upon alcohol buyers or cigarette purchasers . 新西蘭政府對(duì)于煙酒消費(fèi)者加大收稅力度

三段：從飲食和鍛煉角度談及對(duì)于健康的利好：

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Nonetheless, the increased awareness of healthier lifestyle has made plenteous modern people alter their adverse dietary habits and render more concerns over their personal health management. Principally, I myself usually eat a lot of fresh fruits and vegetables. As a great-believer of the saying, “you are what you eat”, I, in most cases, try to avoid too much intake of high fat, sugar and calorie so that my good health can be ensured. After all, it is a hard truth that fruits and vegetables are high in nutritional value because they contain various beneficial vitamins. Likewise, doing some regular physical exercise is a must in the interests of our health. People can easily strengthen their immune system and thus enhance their health index. More precisely, taking up various physical exercises help players relieve their strains and relax their moods. A reportage is persuasive enough to support my point. The scientific research conducted by top medical organizations has found that if a person can do corporal
exercises one hour per day， then, it is likely that he could cope with career tasks at least fifty years and enjoy prolonged lifespan.

尾段：再次亮明觀點(diǎn)：健康需要政府和個(gè)人的協(xié)同努力

People suffer from a variety of health-related problems at times, however careful they are of their health. To make sure that we remain as healthy as possible, joint efforts have to be made by the government and most importantly ourselves.

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