建議一: 避免空洞的單詞和詞組
1. 一些空洞的單詞或詞組根本不能為句子帶來任何相關(guān)的或重要的信息,完全可以被刪掉。比如下面的句子:
When all things are considered, young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion.
這句話當中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都顯得多余。完全可以去掉。改為:
Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents.
2. 有些空洞和繁瑣的表達方式可以進行替換,例如:
Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time.
“due to the fact that”就是一個很典型的繁瑣的表達方式的例子,可以替換,簡化為下面的表達方式:
Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now.
建議二: 避免重復
1. 盡量避免重復使用同樣的詞匯;蛘哂械臅r候雖然詞匯沒有重復,但意思卻有重復。這時候可以做一些簡化的工作。
2. 有時一個詞組可以用一個更簡單的單詞來替換
建議三:選擇最恰當?shù)恼Z法結(jié)構(gòu)
選擇合適的語法結(jié)構(gòu)可以使句子意思的表達更為精確和簡練。雖然語法的多樣性也很重要,但選擇最恰當?shù)恼Z法結(jié)構(gòu)仍然是更為重要的考慮因素。以下原則是在考慮選擇何種語法結(jié)構(gòu)時可以參考的原則:
1. 一個句子的主語和謂語動詞應該能夠反映句子中的最重要的意思。
2. 避免頻繁使用“there be”結(jié)構(gòu),
3. 把從句改為短語或單詞。
4. 僅在需要強調(diào)賓語而不是主語的時候,才使用被動語態(tài)。
5. 用更為精確的一個動詞來代替動詞短語,例如下面這句話:
My grandfather didn't have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends.
Stand around doing nothing其實可以用一個動詞來表達,即loiter:
My grandfather didn't have time to loiter with his school friends.
有時兩句話的信息經(jīng)過組合完全可以用一句話來簡練地表達,例如:
Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too small to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree.
兩句話的信息可以合并為下面這句更為簡潔的句子:
Profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree.
以上就是關(guān)于簡潔高分作文的三點建議,希望本文對你有所幫助~
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