托福獨立寫作范文+解析【2014.4.27】

題目：Agree or disagree: your job has more effect on your happiness than social life does.

題型分類：比較題
　　論證角度：原因挖掘
　　觀點選擇：讓步

開頭：跟社會生活相比，工作對我們幸福的影響更大。（話題引入+他人觀點+明確立場+過渡）

The pursuit of happiness is one of human being's basic rights. Jobs and social lives are two elements that can affect our happiness and people are universally striving for a balance between them.

Thus, an interesting discussion arises on which one exerts more influence upon people's happiness: jobs or social lives? Opinions are divided and from my perspective, jobs outweigh social lives in affecting people's happiness. There are some reasons and examples as follows that illustrate my point of view. （80字）

中間段1：工作能讓人實現(xiàn)自我，充滿有成就感。（主題句+說理論證+細節(jié)例子）

Firstly, jobs make people feel valuable and fulfilled, which is closely related to happiness. It is because everyone is born to this world with a mission. Apart from rudimentary physical demands like eating and sleeping, people need to search for the meaning of life, and working is the best way to realize this kind of value.

It is no denying that the realization of the value of life is the ultimate form of happiness. For example, Steve Jobs, as we all know, is a workaholic without abundant social lives, but from his biography I can feel that his work is the biggest resource of his happiness. (105字)

中間段2：工作帶來財富，而財富是幸福感的物質保證。（主題句+說理論證+細節(jié)例子）

Secondly, jobs bring people money that is the material guarantee of happiness. Albeit ruthless, we have to admit that happiness without the foundation of material is not real happiness. In other word, all seemingly happy lives are based on decent financial strength. Meanwhile, jobs are the most stable way to gain wealth, which indeed plays a significant role in influencing our happiness.

A good case in point is my cousin's family whose happiness is well admired by others. At first, they live in extravagant villa with 3 servants. Besides, my cousin is studying at an American university, while his mother is stunning everyday by using expensive cosmetics and ornaments. In a sense, happiness can be bought by money. (118字)

讓步段：當然，社會生活對一個人幸福感的提升也有作用，比如交朋友本身也是一件令人幸福的事情。但是在社交中，更多的目的還是基于完成工作，純粹的友誼建立很難在社交場合完成。（承認“漏洞”+“堵漏”）

It is true that social lives can have some effects on people's happiness. For instance, one advantage that the participation of social activities is enriching our personal relationships by getting to know more new people, and making friends per se are also a source of happiness.
　　However, the main function of socializing is to make people's future work go smoothly, which is conducted under a pragmatic purpose. The construction of true friendship is hardly achieved in social occasions. (78字) 

結尾：重申觀點，歸納理由/升華主題

In conclusion, compared with social lives, jobs play a more important role in influencing people's happiness. Jobs not only enable people to enjoy a sense of achievement, but also offer a stable source of finance that lays the groundwork for people's happiness. (42字)