托福寫作如何擴充句子 吸引閱卷官？

托�？忌鷤兌枷喈斃Щ螅�究竟什么樣口味的句子才是ETS閱卷官們喜歡的呢?其實，在新托福寫作中，終極口味為“具體具體再具體”，You cannot be more specific. 這也意味著，句子越細節(jié)，你的得分越高，但絕不是生搬硬套東拉西扯。所以本次講解的核心技能就是擴充句子，使其獲得由短變長的飛躍。究竟怎樣擴充句子呢?有如下方式：

1. 增加并列成分;

2. 增加修飾成分;

3. 增加從句;

4. 增加連詞;

如以下例句：

They grow long hair.

這個句子沒有任何閃光點，我們利用以上擴充方法來修改這句話，變成了如下的句子：

They grow long hair, regardless of the gender, usually part of which is dyed in gold.

這句話就相當璀璨奪目，有修飾成分，也有從句。

同理，做以下的三個練習：

1. They wear jeans.

They wear jeans in each and every season, commonly knees of which are deliberate torn.

2. Boys wear earrings.

Boys are keen on earrings and other weird ornaments.

3. Girls smoke.

Girls are fond of Marlboros or some odd bad words.

以下為一組多個句子組成的一段話。

Energy is much needed now. And nuclear plants are clean and economical. They can produce vast amounts of energy. But people, especially local residents are very concerned about safety. They hold a strong negative attitude toward them.

這幾個句子都是簡單句，雖然表達的意思很清楚，但是明顯沒有滿足ETS的口味偏好，下面我們將上述句子搭配成完整的復雜句。合并句子的準則為：同一個詞匯可以合并，變成從句或修飾成分，例如“energy”、“people”。修改后的句子為：

Nuclear plants are a clean and economical way of producing vast amounts of much-needed energy; however people, especially local residents, who are very concerned about safety, hold a strong negative attitude toward them.

同理，做兩個練習：

修改前：Some people succeed. Other people fail. The difference is not the number of opportunities. It is whether they can take advantage of opportunities. Opportunities will arise in the course of one’s life, though they are rare.

修改后：One essential difference between those who succeed and those who fail is the extent to which they take advantage of opportunities rather than the number of opportunities, which will inevitably arise, if rarely, in the course of one’s life.

修改前：College students now are primarily interested in grades and economic success. They are expected to cheat more frequently. They are unlike those graduated ten years ago. They are only interested in their own personal future and consider little the problem of society.

修改后：College students, primarily interested in grades and economic success, are expected to cheat more frequently than those who graduated ten years ago and are far less concerned with the problem of society than with their own personal future.

至此大家應該知道如何使短句變長句了，同學們要時刻牢記：不積跬步無以至千里，不積小流無以成江海。寫作的終極目的是考察學生的語言能力，平庸的短句是無法吸引考官眼球的。