托�？荚噷�(xiě)作關(guān)鍵：文章開(kāi)頭切莫大意

我們都知道文章寫(xiě)作時(shí)，開(kāi)頭很重要。無(wú)論中文寫(xiě)作還是英文寫(xiě)作，好的開(kāi)頭都是成功的一半。在托福考試中，一個(gè)失敗的開(kāi)頭會(huì)給批閱者一個(gè)惡劣的印象。所以，小編為大家整理了在托福獨(dú)立作文中需避免的開(kāi)頭方式，希望考生們引以為戒。

1、廢話連篇急煞讀者

失敗案例：

Topic --Should college students be allowed to get married?

This topic is very interesting. I am very interested in talking about this topic. Because I am also a college student and I am not married……

修改方案：開(kāi)門見(jiàn)山 直奔主題

In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married.

2、觀點(diǎn)不明態(tài)度曖昧

失敗案例：

Topic--Should college students be allowed to get married?

I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……

3、漸行漸遠(yuǎn) 離題千里

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Topic---It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.

4、中式英語(yǔ)人見(jiàn)人跪

失敗案例：

Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life

In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……

Topic 2- The population problem

The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.

Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?

I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chop when I go out buy things……

Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a person always does bad things, he will get “baoying”.

5、語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤慘不忍睹

失敗案例：

Topic---If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished?

About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should.

6、過(guò)分簡(jiǎn)單沒(méi)有重點(diǎn)

失敗案例：

Topic---The importance of environmental protection

This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!

7、用詞不當(dāng)表達(dá)不準(zhǔn)

失敗案例：

Topic--Should college students be allowed to get married?

I think college students should not be allowed to get married because they are very young and so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family.

8、意思重復(fù)徘徊不前

失敗案例：

Topic--Your opinion on DINK families

My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. And it is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society.

9、中國(guó)俗語(yǔ)隨心翻譯

失敗案例：

Topic 1---Is it good to have a large family?

I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……

正確說(shuō)法：Happiness lies in having many children

Topic 2 -Should we pretend to know everything or admit our ignorance?

We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: “Know is know, don’t know is don’t know”……

Topic 3- Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/her family?

Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix, rat’s son can make hole……

Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

I believe one sentence:“A good person is all life safe”. We Chinese people always say: “Good has good pay, bad has bad pay”.

10、觀點(diǎn)武斷脫離實(shí)際

失敗案例：

Topic1--The importance of confidence

In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All the successful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people who don’t have confidence, they all have failed.

Topic 2 -- The solution to the traffic problem

I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’m sure there will be no traffic problem any more.