2019年9月7日雅思大作文真題分析

Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end world poverty and hunger. However, others say that economic growth is damaging the environment and should be stopped. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

解析

本題的解題關(guān)鍵在于如何認(rèn)識經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展與環(huán)境之間的關(guān)系：一些人認(rèn)為經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展是唯一能阻止貧困和饑餓的方式然而另一些人認(rèn)為經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展正是導(dǎo)致貧困和饑餓，所以人們應(yīng)停止發(fā)展經(jīng)濟(jì)。

這篇寫作思路如下：

1. 經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展帶給我們生活上的便捷以及物質(zhì)生活上的提高，但經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展的確會帶來環(huán)境破壞；

2.我們不能因此停止經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展，因?yàn)椋?.只有發(fā)展經(jīng)濟(jì)，社會才能進(jìn)步，人類才能過上好的生活；2.經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展給環(huán)境帶來的破壞可以通過發(fā)達(dá)的科技削弱，甚至消除。

3. 結(jié)論：我們不能放棄經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展，而是找到更好的方法去減輕經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展帶來的環(huán)境破壞。

以下請看高分范文。

As is known to all, the only solution to poverty and hunger is economic growth. However, many people raise objections to economic progress on the ground that it will cause huge damage to the environment.

開頭鋪墊經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展對于消除貧困和饑餓的重要性，運(yùn)用the only solution去突出經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展的重要性。接著提到經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展也會帶來相應(yīng)的環(huán)境破壞，句中raise objection提出反對意見，on the ground 表示由于。由這兩句話作為文章開頭引出下文的討論部分。

It is true, of course, that rapid economic growth often comes at the expense of the environment. This has happened again and again in the world, especially in the developing countries. The relentless urbanization process, for example, has destroyed numerous natural open spaces and animal habitat, and had the dull concrete buildings in their place. Meanwhile, it is not uncommon at all to see the rivers and streams around paper factories (or other manufacturing factories) are so polluted that the water is no longer drinkable.

主體段第一段主要描述經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展對環(huán)境帶來的消極影響，采用總分結(jié)構(gòu)敘述。主題句中at the expense of表示以…..為代價(jià)。Relentless表示無情的，修飾urbanization process（城市化進(jìn)程）dull修飾水泥建筑以表達(dá)貶義。

Yet this does not follow that we could do without economic growth. For one thing, only with fast economic development can people have the opportunities to enjoy a better material life, which is the first-tier need of all people at all times. Though this does not suggest that people's insatiable desire should always be met by developing economy, we can rather safely say that economic growth is often the primary concern for all people, especially those living in poverty and hunger. For another , though economic growth will necessarily bring negative effects on the environment, the effects can well be minimized or even eliminated. Covered with green trees and grasses, many big cities have now attracted birds and other animals back again. The rivers and streams around factories have become clean, too, as purifying technologies are put into use.

主體段第二段以經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展的優(yōu)點(diǎn)作為段落核心觀點(diǎn)，引出經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展帶來的兩大好處，第一經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展是提升人們物質(zhì)水平的重要原因，第二盡管經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展為經(jīng)濟(jì)帶來負(fù)面影響但這些影響可以被減少甚至消除。本段結(jié)構(gòu)以總分為主，for one thing, for another引導(dǎo)出兩個(gè)分論點(diǎn)。First-tier表示一級的修飾人們的需求，insatiable貪得無厭的修飾人們的渴望，minimize和eliminate兩個(gè)動詞的并列和purifying修飾科技的表達(dá)方法值得借鑒，。

My opinion, then, is that economic growth is forever needed in spite of its potential risks to the environment. What we ought to do is try to find ways of reducing its effect on the environment, rather than give up economic development altogether.

總結(jié)段重申自己的觀點(diǎn)，經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展會帶來環(huán)境的破壞但并不代表我們要組織環(huán)境的發(fā)展。In spite of表示盡管引導(dǎo)出讓步結(jié)構(gòu)。

總的來說篇作文屬于雙邊討論類題目，范文內(nèi)容先肯定經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展確實(shí)帶來了一些壞處但中心論點(diǎn)以這些壞處同樣可以被經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展和發(fā)達(dá)的科技所解決，值得借鑒和積累的表達(dá)方式有如下：

1.raise objection：提出反對意見

2.on the ground：由于

3.at the expense of：以…為代價(jià)

4.relentless urbanization process：殘酷的城市化進(jìn)程

5.dull：無聊的

6.first-tier need：首要需求

7.insatiable desire：貪得無厭的需求

8.minimize：最小化

9.eliminate：消除