托福寫(xiě)作考試中,開(kāi)篇是非常重要的,如何能夠在短時(shí)間內(nèi)寫(xiě)出精彩的開(kāi)頭,為我們的寫(xiě)作拿到高分呢?太傻小編為大家整理了相關(guān)的技巧,供大家參考學(xué)習(xí)。
這兩大步驟細(xì)化起來(lái)可以概括為四句話:第一句,采用同義替換的方式對(duì)原題目的意思進(jìn)行更改,當(dāng)然是“形變神不變”;第二句,對(duì)題目的意思進(jìn)行解釋;第三句,提出自己的觀點(diǎn);第四句,概括自己所提出觀點(diǎn)的理由,引起下文。
根據(jù)大家對(duì)托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)的練習(xí)情況,可以總結(jié)了一些常犯的毛病題目來(lái)解釋這個(gè)“兩大步,四個(gè)句子”的具體運(yùn)用方法。
案例1:誤解原意思
Do you agree or disagree: Because people are busy with doing so many things,they can do few things well?
Original:
Some people may hold the view that they are able to do things well even if they are busy with doing so many things simultaneously or during a given period.Although plausible at the first glance, I disagree with the statement.
Depending on my own personal experience and personality, I firmly maintain that people can do few things well when they are busy with doing so many things. My arguments of this opinion are listed as follows.
解析:
文章第一句話不是對(duì)原題目意思進(jìn)行解釋,而是采用采取了和原意思相反的做法來(lái)進(jìn)行題目詮釋;第二句表明自己對(duì)誤解題目的觀點(diǎn);第三句話對(duì)自己的觀點(diǎn)進(jìn)行近一步的解釋;第四句一個(gè)過(guò)渡性的句子。開(kāi)篇內(nèi)容安排倒是很好,但是作者犯了誤解原題目意思的錯(cuò)誤導(dǎo)致后面整個(gè)文字都做了無(wú)用功。
改后:
When people are engaged in a large extent of work simultaneously,they will not be able to perform all of them perfectly.Just imagine how terrible it will be: too many jobs need to be done by the same person in a given time.
Once such a picture appears in my mind, I feel dizzy. To me, it is impossible to do everything well with the limited energy and many others factors.
Therefore,I agree with the statement too many things to be done at the same time cause few to be well done.The reasons are as follow.
Revised:
第一句話對(duì)原題目意思進(jìn)行了很好的詮釋;第二、三句話進(jìn)一步解釋原題目;第四句話提出自己的觀點(diǎn);第五句話過(guò)渡性句子引起下文。
案例2 :語(yǔ)言羅嗦,繞彎子給出自己觀點(diǎn),浪費(fèi)時(shí)間
Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time.
Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
original:
With the development of science and technology, people’s living standard has been improving day by day. According to the family plan, one couple could have only one child.
So child becomes the center of the whole family. Some of them are even spoiled. Therefore, I think it is better if the young adult could live independent from their parents as soon as possible.
解析:
這個(gè)開(kāi)頭看似沒(méi)有任何問(wèn)題,但是仔細(xì)分析就會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)很多問(wèn)題。首先,作者繞了個(gè)大彎才給出自己的觀點(diǎn)。其次,觀點(diǎn)是對(duì)原題目的抄寫(xiě),改動(dòng)的比較少。最后,開(kāi)篇缺少引起下文的過(guò)渡句。更大的錯(cuò)誤是這個(gè)開(kāi)頭更像是一個(gè)全文主要觀點(diǎn)的一個(gè)分論點(diǎn)。
Revised:
As we all know, some young adults have the sense of independence in a special period so that they want to choose to live apart from their family, while others still choose to stay with parents in the family.
Family can provide young adults a warm bay where he or she could turn to whenever any problems arise. However,considering the sound development of the young adult both mentally and physically,I think to live independently the earlier, the better.
Independence is a lesson that each of us must face one day. The detailed reasons are listed below.
解析:
第一句話詮釋原題目意思;第二句話進(jìn)一步解釋第一句話;第三句話提出自己的觀點(diǎn);第四句話解釋自己的觀點(diǎn),引出下文。
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