雅思寫作素材社會類分析

2016年1月14日

【題目1】A recent newspaper article report that a 14 years old boy who seriously destroyed school got a punishment to clean streets instead of sent to the prison. Do you think this is right? Or the young criminals should be sent to the jail?
一篇最近的報紙文字報道14歲的年輕人校園違規(guī)后會受到做清潔工作的處罰而非服刑，你認(rèn)為少年犯是否應(yīng)該被送進(jìn)監(jiān)獄?
提問方式：觀點類

雅思寫作結(jié)構(gòu)：   
第一段：背景介紹+本人立場
第二段：對于初次犯罪者或過失犯罪者的處罰措施
第三段：討論其他處罰措施
第四段：總結(jié)立場

雅思寫作詳解：

【首段】 背景介紹+本人立場

Alarmingly, various misdeeds among teenagers ranging from school bullying or sex assault are now becoming big headaches in many countries. Juvenile delinquency not only afflicts the victims but also jeopardizes the community. Many efforts have already been made on how to crack down juvenile crime, but the effect is far from satisfying. This essay aims to represent relevant measures of penalties.

【詞伙】
1. juvenile delinquency = teenage crime = youth crime n 青少年犯罪
2. afflict = agonize = distress v 使痛苦
3. jeopardize the community = endanger the society v 危害社會
4. crack down juvenile crime v降低青少年犯罪
5. measures of penalty = measures of punishment n 懲罰措施

【二段】 對于初次犯罪者或過失犯罪者的處罰措施：

Nobody is innate perpetrator，during the journey of life，those who are in the formative years are，sometimes，derailed by manifold causes such as the negative influence of negative mass media, the disadvantaged family background or external factors. In this sense, stricter penalty for the first offenders, unintentional lawbreakers is far from rational, especially when taking the teenagers’ immature mentality into account. Virtually, appropriate punishment is commendable, to motivate those juvenile offenders to serve the community or sweeping the street can be reasonable measures.
 
1. Nobody is innate perpetrator. 人性本善
2. In this sense, stricter penalty for the first offenders, unintentional lawbreakers is far from rational, especially when taking the teenagers’ immature mentality into account. 因此，對于初犯者或者過失犯罪者，重罰遠(yuǎn)非理性，尤其當(dāng)我們考慮到他們不成熟的心智的時候。
3. To motivate those juvenile offenders to serve the community or sweeping the street can be reasonable measures. 鼓勵少年犯服務(wù)社區(qū)或者清掃街道都是合理的措施。
sweep v打掃(尤其是用大柄掃把清掃街道)
The economic crisis is sweeping across the world. 經(jīng)濟(jì)危機(jī)正在席卷全球。

【三段】 為何不能固定刑罰，其他處罰措施有哪些：

Notwithstanding all that，taking the effects of a misconduct and its motivation into consideration is a prerequisite for ensuring justice of the law. There should not be fixed punishment for all youth crime. Some misdeeds, for example, school bullying or sex assaults will inevitably distress the sufferers and endanger the society. Hence, light penalty for felony is unwise. Conversely, stricter punishment for hardened criminals will not only embody the justice of law but also exert a deterrent effect on those potential malefactors.
 
1. a prerequisite n一種必要條件
2. Taking the effects of misconduct and its motivation into consideration is a prerequisite for ensuring justice of the law. 考慮到犯罪的影響和動機(jī)是缺乏法律公正的先決條件。
3. School bullying or sex assaults will inevitably distress the sufferers and endanger the society. 性攻擊或校園欺凌會不可避免地傷害受害者，危及社會安定。
4. Light penalty for felony is unwise. 重罪輕罰是不明智的。
5. Stricter punishment for hardened criminals will not only embody the justice of law but also exert a deterrent effect on those potential malefactors. 對于重刑犯的嚴(yán)厲處罰不僅體現(xiàn)法律公正，而且，可以震懾潛在的犯罪分子。

【四段】總結(jié)立場

To sum up，there is no simple resolution for such a complicate social problem，it is reasonable to expect that the combination of these suggestions may be needed. Custom-tailored penalty may be the best strategy for each teenage crime.
 
Custom-tailored penalty may be the best strategy for each teenage crime 對于每一種少年犯罪行為的量體裁衣的處罰措施也許才是最好的

【補(bǔ)充語料】
1. the custom-made penalty n量體裁衣的處罰措施
2. violate the law = perpetrate the law v違反法律
3. conduct ant-social offences v 做出反社會行為
4. arouse one’s violent impulse v誘發(fā)了人的暴力的沖動
5. enable those who are led astray to make compensation for their misconducts v使那些誤入迷途者對于他們的過失做出補(bǔ)償
6. reflect on their evil lives v反思他們罪惡的人生
7. As for those hardened teenage criminals, the government should be urged to impose stricter penalty on them so that other potential young law-breakers can be deterred. 對于青少年慣犯而言，政府應(yīng)該加大懲罰措施，這樣可以震懾潛在的犯罪分子。
8. So immature and inexperienced are some youngsters that they tend to blindly imitate what they have seen, especially when they expose to pornographic movies and violent on-line games. 一些年輕人是如此不成熟，缺乏經(jīng)驗，以至于他們會盲目地效仿他們看到的一切，尤其是當(dāng)他們接觸到色情電影和暴力游戲的時候。
9. In this sense, their cause of committing crimes can be owed to the negative influence of the mass media. 因此，他們的犯罪原因可以被歸結(jié)為商業(yè)化大眾傳媒的不良影響。
10. The young prisoners should be inspired and educated to serve the community to compensate for their misdeeds, sweeping the street can be a good in case in point. 少年犯應(yīng)該被鼓勵和教育去做社區(qū)服務(wù)，以彌補(bǔ)他們的犯罪行為，清潔街道也許就是很好的方法。

2016年2月20日

【雅思作文題目2】Nowadays a large amount of advertising aims at children and exerts negative effects on them, so it should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
如今大量的廣告面向兒童并對他們產(chǎn)生了負(fù)面影響，因此這些廣告應(yīng)該被禁止。在多大程度上你同意還是不同意？
提問方式：觀點類

雅思寫作結(jié)構(gòu)：雙邊討論模式
第一段：現(xiàn)象句+考題改寫+本人立場
第二段：討論兒童廣告的好處
第三段：討論兒童廣告的壞處
第四段：讓步+重申立場
 
一邊倒討論
第一段：現(xiàn)象句+考題改寫+本人立場
第二段：討論兒童廣告應(yīng)該禁止的原因
第三段：討論兒童廣告應(yīng)該禁止的原因
第四段：總結(jié)重申立場

【一段】現(xiàn)象句+考題改寫+本人立場
Advertisements aiming at children can be seen everywhere these days: TV, newspapers and magazines, Internet. Many people believe they should be banned because of their negative effects on children. While these advertisements do have some benefits - they are informative at least, I am quite convinced that they are more harmful than beneficial to children.
be seen everywhere 到處可見 have some benefits 有利
be more harmful than beneficial to  害處大于益處

【二段】兒童廣告應(yīng)該禁止的原因

In the first place, in order to attract children, many advertisers tend to overemphasis the "fun side" of their products. More often than not they will promote such products as computer games, dolls, animal parks and so on. I admit these stuff may be important to children, yet too much of them would distract children from their study. Even when they are advertising learning-aid products, the advertisers often claim their products will make children's learning process full of fun. This is really bad because it gives children a false impression that they do not have to put serious efforts into their study. In addition, children advertising is not desirable because it often leads children to buying things that they do not really need. That is why many parents complain that their children do not buy anything but those expensive "famous brands" such as Adidas, Nike and the like.
distract from 轉(zhuǎn)移
overemphasis the "fun side" of the products 過度強(qiáng)調(diào)商品的娛樂性

【三段】兒童廣告應(yīng)該禁止的原因

At the same time, children advertising is partly responsible for children being kept away from the reality. Catering to the psychological needs of children, many advertisements describe the world in highly imaginative and unrealistic manners. For instance, when they want to promote their doll weapons, they will describe the world as a place full of bad guys. A child exposed to such advertising may develop a deep sense of hostility to the world. On the other hand, when they want to sell entertainment park tickets to children, they will describe the world as a place full of love and without any danger at all. A child who has been made to believe this kind of advertising will have a hard time when they come across troubles in real life.
Cater to 迎合
develop a deep sense of hostility 造成一種深深的敵意

【四段】總結(jié)重申立場

To conclude, since most children advertisements are misleading, they are really harmful to children who are not old enough to tell the difference between imagination and reality. Indeed, these advertisements may provide useful information for children, but these information can be obtained from other more reliable sources. Therefore, I hold the strong opinion that children advertising be banned.
tell the difference between imagination and reality 區(qū)分想象和現(xiàn)實
provide useful information 提供有用的信息

2016年1月23日

【雅思作文題目3】The news media has become more influential in people’s lives, some people think it’s negative development. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
人們消費的增多會導(dǎo)致對自然環(huán)境更大的破壞。這是為什么？我們可以采取什么措施來減少對自然環(huán)境的破壞？

結(jié)構(gòu)：
第一段：背景介紹+爭議焦點+本人立場
第二段：讓步段：新聞傳媒也許可能對人們的生活造成不良影響
第三段：反駁段：新聞傳媒給人們的生活帶來的利好
第四段：反駁段：新聞傳媒給人們的生活帶來的利好
第五段；再次亮明觀點

【首段】背景介紹+爭議焦點+本人立場

Perhaps nobody can avoid being swayed by various mass media. The news media have been exerting a tremendous influence on our lives because they can not only bring about glaring changes to the lives of ordinary people，but even ruin a political leader. Some people worry that the impacts of mass media are quite negative. From my perspective, however, what the news media can benefit us is greater than what they might influence us adversely.

1. The news media have been exerting a tremendous influence on our lives because they can not only bring about glaring changes to the lives of ordinary people，but ruin a political leader .
新聞媒體具有巨大的影響力，它們不僅可以給普通人的生活帶來重大的變化，甚至還能推翻一個政客。
2. From my perspective, however, what the news media can benefit us is greater than what they might influence us adversely.
然而，我認(rèn)為，新聞給我們帶來的利好遠(yuǎn)勝過其可能產(chǎn)生的不良影響。

【二段】 讓步段：新聞傳媒也許可能對人們的生活造成不良影響。

The opposite stand is also understandable. It is true that some paparazzi of tabloid magazines like to publish details about those superstars’ private lives，which might bring untold agonies to heroes of the story. Likewise, for the purpose of catering to the taste of the general public, some editors of newspapers and magazines also enjoy deliberately exaggerating so as to create a sensation. Surely enough, such irresponsible reportages should be highly condemned. However, we have no reason to throw out the baby with bath water.

1. Some paparazzi tabloid magazines like to publish details about the superstars’ private lives，which might bring untold agonies to heroes of the story.
一些八卦小報的狗仔隊喜歡發(fā)表關(guān)于明星生活隱私的細(xì)節(jié)，這會給當(dāng)事人帶來極大的痛苦。
2. Some editors of newspapers and magazines also enjoy deliberately exaggerating so as to create a sensation.
一些報刊雜志的編輯喜歡刻意夸大事實，以達(dá)到聳人聽聞的目的。
3. Surely enough, such irresponsible reportages should be highly condemned.
當(dāng)然，這些不負(fù)責(zé)任的報道應(yīng)該被譴責(zé)。
4. However, we have no reason to throw out the baby with bath water.
但是，不分糟粕精華而全盤否定是不理性的。

【三段】 反駁段：新聞傳媒給人們的生活帶來的利好。

On no account can we underestimate the positive influences brought about by the news media. First, the mass media can play the role of educator. As for those who lack the habit of reading news, they are rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and the experience of the world. Conversely, reading news frequently can help us have a broader view of life and thus train our dialectical mode of thinking.

1. They are rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and the experience of the world.
他們在常識和閱歷方面都很受局限。
2. Reading news frequently can help us have a broader view of life and thus train our dialectical mode of thinking.
經(jīng)常閱讀新聞傳媒可以拓寬我們的人生視野，因此，鍛煉我們的辯證性思維。

【四段】 反駁段：新聞傳媒給人們的生活帶來的利好。

Also, various mews media can be an indispensable source of information for the vast majority of people. To illustrate, one of the most crucial lessons of a great many entrepreneurs is to Watch CCTV news everyday to familiarize themselves with the latest governmental policies and market information. Eventually, those amusing news stories can add color to the dull routine of every day life. I myself enjoy appreciate stories concerning the common people or mediocre life so that I could greatly deepen my insight into diverse lifestyles and grow spiritually during the process of thinking.
　
1. Various mews media can be an indispensable source of information for the vast majority of people. 各種新聞傳媒可以是大多數(shù)人獲得信息的不可缺少的源泉。
2. Those amusing news stories can add color to the dull routine of every day life. 有趣的新聞報道可以增加我們枯燥常規(guī)生活的樂趣。
3. I could greatly deepen my insight into diverse lifestyles and grow spiritually during the process of thinking. 我可以極大地加深我對于不同的生活方式的洞察，思考的過程也讓我在精神上成長。

【五段】再次亮明觀點

In closing, my stand is that various news media have and will have irreplaceable roles to play in our daily lives, the influence， to large extent， depends on how we treat and harness them. It is rather groundless to simply say that their impacts can always be baneful

It is rather groundless to simply say that their impacts can always be baneful. 簡單認(rèn)為他們的影響是消極的是相當(dāng)沒有根據(jù)的。

【補(bǔ)充】
1. negative = adverse = baneful adj. 有害的
2. the mass media = the news media = the media n 媒體
3. indispensable = crucial = vital adj. 重要的
4.indispensable=irreplaceable=nonsubstitutable adj. 不可替代的
5. influence = affect = impact n. 影響

2016年3月5日

【題目4】we can get knowledge from news. But some people even think we should not trust the journalists. What do you think? And what do you think are the important qualities that a journalist should have?
我們從新聞中獲得知識。但是一些人認(rèn)為我們不應(yīng)該信任記者。你怎么看？一個好記者應(yīng)該具備哪些素質(zhì)?

雅思寫作結(jié)構(gòu)：
第一段：現(xiàn)象句+考題改寫
第二段：討論不應(yīng)該信任記者的原因
第三段：討論一個好記者要具備的素質(zhì)
第四段：總結(jié)聲明本人立場

【首段】現(xiàn)象句+考題改寫

News is an important source of knowledge. Every day we get to know about the world by reading news. For instance, by reading politics section of a newspaper, we can make rather accurate prediction about who is going to win the presidential election in the United States; by reading science section, we can better understand the state-of-art technology in space exploration.

【二段】討論不應(yīng)該信任記者的原因

However, many people are gradually losing their interest in news, for they have every reason to doubt the truthfulness of news. They often accuse the journalists of presenting the truth or reality in a wrong way so as to mislead the news readers. It is indeed the case for many journalists. Those journalists may misreport the private life of a movie star ( for example, his love affairs which do not exist actually) in order to arouse the eye-ball of the theater-goers. Other journalists may give biased coverage of an event for economic, political, social and various other reasons.
misreport the private life 錯誤報道私生活

【三段】討論一個好記者要具備的素質(zhì)

Of course, we do have many excellent journalists on whom we place our trust. Then, what makes a successful journalist? In other words, what are the qualities that a journalist must possess? To my mind, the ability to make fair judgment is the first important quality that a journalist should have. When faced with a series of complicated events, a journalist will have many decisions to make: what to report, from whose perspectives, for what purposes? Only with a fair sense of judgment and the willingness to make things right can a journalist bring out a news report closest to the real state of affairs. Too often we have read the uninteresting or distorted news, simply because the journalist who has written the news is not able to make the right decisions. Besides, a journalist should a hard-working person. A lot of events take place in unusual places or at unlikely hours, which makes it almost impossible for a journalist to report them accurately if he/she just sits in front of a computer at home. Those willing to travel to different places and wake up in early morning from cozy dreams have better chances to become great journalists. Finally, a journalist must love writing and be able to express his thoughts precisely. This is almost self-evident and does not need further explanation at all.
make fair judgment作出公正的判斷
bring out a news report closest to the real state of affairs寫出最接近事情本來面貌的報道

【尾段】總結(jié)聲明本人立場

We all need news for information and knowledge, and in order for news to be reliable rather than misleading, a journalist must have a willing heart to pursue truth, a fair judgment and most important of all, a strong ability to express his/her mind with words.
pursue truth追尋事實
express his/her mind with words用文字表達(dá)想法

2016年3月19日

【題目5】some people think health care should be free for everyone, while others think they should pay medical costs for themselves. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

一部分人認(rèn)為醫(yī)療應(yīng)該免費，另一部分認(rèn)為醫(yī)療不應(yīng)該免費。就雙方觀點說說自己的見解，并給出自己的觀點。

提問方式：觀點類

雅思寫作結(jié)構(gòu)：
第一段：背景句+轉(zhuǎn)述題目+本人觀點
第二段：討論醫(yī)療保健應(yīng)該免費原因
第三段：討論不應(yīng)該免費原因
第四段：給出本人觀點
第五段：總結(jié)兩方觀點+強(qiáng)化自身觀點

【首段】背景句+轉(zhuǎn)述題目+本人觀點

Economists state that providing healthcare is good public policy as it is the humane thing to do and in the long run, it will be cost effective. It is evident that proper health care is imperative to implement, but the issue arises when we have to decide if whether it should be free or not. In my opinion, everyone should receive at least basic health care as long as some particular medical needs (特殊醫(yī)療需求) can be simultaneously met.
be humane人道的
be cost effective 劃算的
imperative必要的;不可避免的
implement 實施
simultaneously 與此同時地

【二段】醫(yī)療保健應(yīng)該免費原因

Health care, as some argue, should not be a commodity only for wealthy people; it should be a basic right for all individuals, no matter age, race, ethnicity or gender. This means medical care must be provided to all citizens, and lack of affordability should not become a problem. Society functions better when people with fewer economic resources can still be treated by a doctor. Referring to the insured and uninsured citizens in the United States, for example, the risk of death for uninsured women with a diagnosis of breast cancer (乳腺癌) is 30% to 50% greater than for those who are insured. Therefore, if there was a government-funded healthcare system, people would not have to worry about the possibility of not having insurance.
ethnicity民族
lack of affordability 負(fù)擔(dān)能力
the insured and uninsured citizens已投保和未投保的公民
a basic right for all individuals一項個人的基本權(quán)利
a government-funded healthcare system政府出資的醫(yī)療體系

【三段】不應(yīng)該免費原因

However, opponents (n. 反對者) think free healthcare is not realistic individuals should bear (vt. 承擔(dān)) medical costs for themselves. First, the motivation of profit, competition, and individual ingenuity have always led to greater cost control and largely more effective pharmaceutical and medical-device firms. Free healthcare would result in fewer incentives to innovate (創(chuàng)新的激勵), as there is no room to maximize profit and this therefore slows down the research process for new medicine. Second, patients, even those with high-deductible insurance plans, pay for only a fraction of the cost of healthcare. Doctors who prescribe healthcare do not typically face price-sensitive customers. Neither have the vaguest idea of the true cost of providing healthcare. Where there are no prices and no understanding of the actual cost of services, there can be no market.
bear medical costs承擔(dān)醫(yī)療花費
the motivation of profit 利潤驅(qū)使
high-deductible insurance plans 高免賠額保險計劃

【四段】 自己的觀點

For me, tempting as free health care may seem, we should not be fooled by the option of allowing the government to provide universal health care. This health care plan does not truly support the needs of patients because it focuses on the public in general, versus (prep. 與…相對) the needs of each individual citizen. Additionally, "free" healthcare is not free but contains an enormous cost (巨大的成本) since people must pay for it with taxes; expenses for health care would have to be paid for with higher taxes or spending cuts in other areas such as defense, education, etc.

【尾段】總結(jié)兩方觀點+強(qiáng)化自身觀點

To conclude, in the debate over free health care, I think the basic question – whether people should have free basic health care and/or transfer payments for particular diseases – must be answered first. I believe in civilized countries heath care should be available according to need rather than the ability to pay.

2016年1月9日

【題目6】Most government money should be invested in teaching science rather than any other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress。To what extent do you agree or disagree?

大部分的政府資金應(yīng)該投資在教授科學(xué)而不是其他學(xué)科上，為了國家的發(fā)展和進(jìn)步。你多大程度上同意或不同意？

提問方式：觀點類

結(jié)構(gòu)：
第一段：現(xiàn)象句+考題改寫+本人立場
第二段：讓步段，承認(rèn)科學(xué)發(fā)展對一國的發(fā)展的確重要
第三段：說明別的學(xué)科也同樣重要
第四段：總結(jié)和重申本人立場

【首段】現(xiàn)象句+考題改寫+本人立場No country develops without the facilitation of science and technology. Therefore, some people believe that science, as a school subject, should enjoy more benefits from governmental sponsorship than any other subjects. Personally, I think those people are near-sighted.
 
【二段】讓步段：科學(xué)教育的確重要。

Admittedly, science is essential in a country’s development, since it determines the strength of national defense and the potential of economic progress. As a result, people educated in the scientific field are highly required by the society, and that justifies the notion that scientific education should be put emphasis on in the school.

【三段】這并不意味著別的學(xué)科的教育不重要。

However, that is not to say that science is more important than any other subjects and thus should be the major beneficiary of governmental sponsorship, since the prosperity of a country calls for talents from a wide range of fields. As has long been proved, at the same time when science and technology is boosting a country’s social and economic development, various problems have also occurred which will sooner or later defer a country’s further development. Those problems include but are not limited to the increase in crime rate, social unjustice, environmental pollution and unprecedented mental and physical diseases. Hence, we need not only scientific experts, but also experts in law, economy, medicine and some other fields to make the progressing path more smooth for a country. To illustrate, it is true that scientists are required to deal with global warming, since we could only count on them to find out the causes and the corresponding solutions of this problem. At the same time, we also need authors and activists such as Al Gore to improve people’s awareness, and law experts to confine human activities to the degree that does less harm to the environment.
 governmental sponsorship政府贊助

【尾段】總結(jié)和重申本人立場
To conclude, it is not only science that plays an influential role in a country’s development, and therefore it is suggested that government put equal emphasis in different school subjects for the sake of safe development.

2016年1月30日

【題目7】

in some countries, the government has tried to reduce traffic. For instance, they imposed a congestion tax during rush hour. Do you think this development is positive or negative?
在一些城市，政府試圖緩解交通壓力，例如，征收高峰期通行費，你認(rèn)為有力還是有弊?

雅思寫作結(jié)構(gòu)：
第一段：現(xiàn)象句+考題改寫+本人立場
第二段：討論司機(jī)付費的好處
第三段：討論司機(jī)付費的好處
第四段：讓步，加以反駁
第五段：總結(jié)和重申本人立場

【首段】背景介紹+本人立場

Going through the rush hours is a tiresome business. The prevalence of various public transport has led to severe traffic congestion，especially during the rush hours. Being stuck in the long queues of vehicles seems to be a big headache for many city dwellers. Personally speaking, it is about time governments adopted effective measures, drivers should be charged when they need to drive out in a heavy traffic, which will exert a really positive impact on reducing the serious traffic conditions.

【二段】討論司機(jī)付費的好處

For a start, paying some permission fees could decrease the incidence of going through the busy traffic. To be more specific, some drivers would be unwilling to drive their cars in order to save money when they have no urgent things. Hence，this will mitigate the pressure of heavy traffic congestion. Further, the decreasing number of cars will also purify the air and reduce the noise. As a result, the living quality of the whole city will be greatly optimized, citizens will enjoy a cleaner environment.

【三段】討論司機(jī)付費的好處

This debate reminds me of my own city. Our city government has fewer policies in terms of tackling the pressure of traffic congestion, which negatively influences people’s normal work. The large amount of release of exhaust gas has deteriorated the environment. Even worse, long time wait will ruin the drivers’ moods. Consequently, some people might fail to happily perform their working tasks when they arrive at the workplace. By contrast, the fee from drivers increases the governmental income so that more financial budget could be allocated to perfecting the traffic conditions. Specifically, the government could build more over-bridges to reduce the pressure of traffic jam.

【四段】 讓步向司機(jī)收費的弊端 + 加以反駁

Granted, I have to concede that this policy might impose much pressure upon the drivers economically. If they pay even limited amount of money every day, then there will be large sums of money as a whole. What I want to rebut, however, is that in time of a traffic jam, the oil consumption is much more than that of driving a slowly moving car. The cost of gasoline may be even expensive than the counterpart people pay for driving permission.

【尾段】 再次亮明觀點

In closing, I re-affirm my conviction that it is worthwhile to ask for driving permission fees when the traffic is busy.

2016年4月16日

【題目8】

When new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

現(xiàn)代有很多新的城鎮(zhèn)，建造更多的公共公園和運(yùn)動設(shè)施比商場更能讓人們度過閑暇的時光。你在多大程度上同意還是不容易？

雅思寫作結(jié)構(gòu)：
第一段：背景介紹+標(biāo)題改寫+本人立場
第二段：討論建設(shè)購物中心的好處
第三段：討論建設(shè)購物中心的另一個好處
第四段：總結(jié)，重申觀點

【首段】背景介紹+標(biāo)題改寫+本人立場

The rational plan for different functioning zones a city or a town before its construction is vital for its long term development. In many of the functioning zones, there is a discussion over whether the building of public parks or sports facilities should be more valued than the construction of the shopping malls, As a city dweller, I tend to favor the development some shopping centers.
long term development長期發(fā)展

【二段】建設(shè)購物中心的好處

If a town is planned for more shopping centers, Its citizens can have more access to a diverse life. Many shopping centers, under the influence of the advanced and trendy belief，are more than a place where the customers do Some shopping by splurging their money or there are assorted commodities In another word, shopping malls are the combination of many other public sports, in which cinemas, restaurants and even some small sized amusement parks can be introduced. Thus, With only the planning and building of the shopping malls, the residents can have more destinations to go to during their spare time, adding more spice to their city life.
access to a diverse life接觸到不同的生活

【三段】討論建設(shè)購物中心的另一個好處

Another merit for building the shopping centers that it can be less influenced by the external weather condition, which can ensure that citizens can enjoy their free time with less restriction. The public parks and some sports facilities are often exposed in open air, and people are likely to feel hopeless and upset if their recreational plans or body-building plans will be spoil by some unexpected events. By contrast, the shopping centers are modern constructions which free from the Influence of some natural influences.

less influenced by the external weather condition少受到外界天氣的影響

【尾段】總結(jié)，重申觀點
To conclude, I am in favor of giving priority to develop the shopping centers, although other functioning zones such as parks and sports facilities are necessary to some extent.