雅思小作文中的趨勢變化和數(shù)據(jù)對比

審題：

該題是表格題，橫列為三列不同的消費品，分別是食物/飲料/香煙、衣服/ 鞋子、 休閑/ 教育�？v列為5個不同的國家，分別是愛爾蘭、意大利、西班牙、瑞典和土耳其。數(shù)據(jù)形式為百分比。

寫作思路：

表格題寫作思路關鍵首先在于分析橫、縱列，然后得出寫作順序。重點分析動態(tài)的變化和靜態(tài)的比較。本題是同一年，也就是固定時間段里的比較，不涉及動態(tài)的變化。 在靜態(tài)比較方面，有兩個思路：一是每個國家在不同消費品開支上的比較；二是不同國家在同一消費品開支上的比較。從兩個思路中任選一個，都能描述出表格的核心信息。但是，到底用哪個思路寫，就取決于到底哪個是表格的主要特點，主要趨勢。

很明顯，每個國家在不同消費品的開支上，總體趨勢是一致的，都是食物/飲料/香煙最多，休閑/體育最少。所以，從這個角度來講，這個思路去寫文章比較難出彩；而縱向?qū)Ρ龋�不同國家在同一消費品開支上還是差別很大的。這明顯是我們比較的重點。因此，本文用第二個思路去比較，顯然更容易寫。而思路一則可一筆帶過。

內(nèi)容分析: 主講趨勢變化和數(shù)據(jù)對比。

1. 就靜態(tài)比較思路這一點上，劍7考生范文中分別用了3句話來表達“每個國家在不同消費品的開支上，總體趨勢是一致的，都是食物/飲料/香煙最多，休閑/體育最少”這個意思。緊接著就是單純的數(shù)據(jù)羅列，同時缺乏具體分析。原文如下：① Food, drinks and tobacco were in the most position on consumer spending in all of the five countries. ② Clothing and footwear were the second important consumer spending in these countries. ③ The last consumer spending were leisure and education.

但我們完全可以這樣，一筆帶過：The graph illustrated the information about consumer expenditure on three kinds of items in 2002 in five different countries. It’s clear that the percentage of spending on food, drinks and tobacco was the highest while that on leisure and education remained the smallest.

2. 就數(shù)據(jù)比較上，學生范文純列數(shù)據(jù)，沒有分析，也沒有清楚提到這些百分比代表的含義。而高質(zhì)量的寫作是要求同學們對數(shù)據(jù)加以分析對比的。

舉例來看：

例一：

純列數(shù)據(jù)版：In Italy, they got 9%, and in Sweden, they were 5.4%. In the other three countries, the figure were very similar, all were near 6.5%.

對比分析版：Italy had the highest proportion in terms of clothing as well as footwear. The figure for Turkey, Spain and Ireland came the next, ranging from 6% to 7%. By contrast, people in Sweden spent the least on those items compared with other four countries.

例二：

稍有分析版：Food, drinks and tobacco were in the most important position on consumer spending in all of the five countries, and in a different percentage. In Ireland and Turkey, they were near 30%, while in the other three countries they were under 20%.

改進分析版：Food, drinks and tobacco constituted the largest proportion of national consumer expenditure. The largest percentage of consumer spending was in Turkey at slightly over 30%. It was followed by Ireland, Spain and Italy, with a percentage slightly below 30%, under 20% and above 16% respectively. Sweden had the smallest percentage at approximately 16%, which was around half of the highest percentage in Turkey.

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