托福寫作言簡(jiǎn)意賅很重要

不少同學(xué)托福寫作中覺得復(fù)雜句可以提升作文的質(zhì)量，展示自己“地道”的英文，獲得高分。這種想法有一定的道理，原因是新托福寫作的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中確實(shí)有從語法或用詞的多樣性等角度考察語言質(zhì)量的評(píng)分項(xiàng)目，但有時(shí)生硬地追求長(zhǎng)句、復(fù)雜句反而破壞句子的準(zhǔn)確性。下面，我們就來談?wù)勅绾问鼓愕耐懈�寫作言�?jiǎn)意賅，用簡(jiǎn)潔的語言寫出漂亮的句子。

　　建議一： 避免空洞的單詞和詞組

　　1. 一些空洞的單詞或詞組根本不能為句子帶來任何相關(guān)的或重要的信息，完全可以被刪掉。比如下面的句子：

　　When all things are considered, young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion.

　　這句話當(dāng)中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都顯得多余。完全可以去掉。改為：

　　Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents.

　　2. 有些空洞和繁瑣的表達(dá)方式可以進(jìn)行替換，例如：

　　Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time.

　　“due to the fact that”就是一個(gè)很典型的繁瑣的表達(dá)方式的例子，可以替換，簡(jiǎn)化為下面的表達(dá)方式：

　　Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now.

　　建議二： 避免重復(fù)

　　1. 盡量避免重復(fù)使用同樣的詞匯�；蛘哂械臅r(shí)候雖然詞匯沒有重復(fù)，但意思卻有重復(fù)。這時(shí)候可以做一些簡(jiǎn)化的工作。例如下面這個(gè)例子：:

　　The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size.

　　large 對(duì)一個(gè)farm來說就是size方面的large，所以in size可以去掉，改為：

　　The farm my grandfather grew up on was large.

　　更簡(jiǎn)潔的表達(dá)方式為：

　　My grandfather grew up on a large farm.

　　2. 有時(shí)一個(gè)詞組可以用一個(gè)更簡(jiǎn)單的單詞來替換，例如：

　　My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents’ farm.

　　這里的over and over again就可以改為repeatedly，顯得更為簡(jiǎn)潔：

　　My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents’ farm.