摘要：雅思考官simon應(yīng)該大多數(shù)備考過一段時(shí)間的雅思考生都有所耳聞。他的雅思大小作文范文是受坊間追捧的必備寫作資料，但是即使是在這偏偏都滿分的高能輔助下，為何眾人的雅思寫作分?jǐn)?shù)一直還是最不愿意提起的傷痛？
很多的備考雅思的筒子都在學(xué)習(xí)Simon的范文，他的范文走的是完全的平民路線，看其遣詞造句，貌似平平，其實(shí)是大有丘壑，有我們這些為了雅思寫作7分都在苦苦求索的人所不具有的用最精簡的用詞，最少的篇幅講明白一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)的大能力。他的范文也是很多真的懂雅思寫作的老師唯一推薦的材料。
但是，很多同學(xué)反應(yīng)，背了很多范文，甚至還模仿了很多篇，仍然沒有效果，為什么?
原因是，考官不是non-native speaker, 他們不了解你們的最大問題 是“ 邏輯”+“ 詞組”
這一點(diǎn)從Simon對于這篇9分范文的分析就可以看出：
Topic:In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
sample essay:In recent years it has become far more normal for people to live alone, particularly in large cities in the developed world. In my opinion, this trend is having both positive and negative consequences in equal measure.
The rise in one-person households can be seen as positive for both personal and broader economic reasons. On an individual level, people who choose to live alone may become more independent and self-reliant than those who live with family members. A young adult who lives alone, for example, will need to learn to cook, clean, pay bills and manage his or her budget, all of which are valuable life skills. From an economic perspective, the trend towards living alone will result in greater demand for housing. This is likely to benefit the construction industry, estate agents and a whole host of other companies that rely on homeowners to buy their products or services.
However, the personal and economic arguments given above can be considered from the opposite angle. Firstly, rather than the positive feeling of increased independence, people who live alone may experience feelings of loneliness, isolation and worry. They miss out on the emotional support and daily conversation that family or flatmates can provide, and they must bear the weight of all household bills and responsibilities; in this sense, perhaps the trend towards living alone is a negative one. Secondly, from the financial point of view, a rise in demand for housing is likely to push up property prices and rents. While this may benefit some businesses, the general population, including those who live alone, will be faced with rising living costs.
In conclusion, the increase in one-person households will have both beneficial and detrimental effects on individuals and on the economy.
Simon 自己對于范文的分析： Band 9
Coherence and cohesion
Ideas are presented in a logical and organised way.
Cohesive devices (linking) are used in an effective but subtle way - they help with the development of ideas, but do not overshadow those ideas.
你能看出上面分析的問題嗎?我們只看下面的句子
“ ideas are presented in a logical and organised way”
請問，哪一個(gè)句子叫做 ” organizsed in a logical way”？怎么樣寫就不logical？你可以回答這個(gè)問題嗎?
Simon材料唯一的缺陷就是，不具體，沒有把“ logical way” 在文中的具體體現(xiàn)，舉例子說明。這樣對于non-native speaker 來說，是很難理解的。
下面是我對于logical 的分析：
第二個(gè)段落的 Topic sentence:
包括了該段落兩個(gè)分論點(diǎn)的概括： personal and broader economic reasons
第二個(gè)段落的第二個(gè)句子：用abc 詞組論證論點(diǎn)：
( Simon 只給出了2個(gè)詞組，我一般會給出3個(gè))
People who choose to live alone may become more independent and self-reliant than those who live with family members.
a: live alone
b: more independent and self-reliant
a動作發(fā)生，然后才有b動作發(fā)生
這樣的時(shí)間順序，叫做“ logical way”
用例子來論證abc詞組：
A young adult who lives alone, for example, will need to learn to cook, clean, pay bills and manage his or her budget, all of which are valuable life skills.
例子中的abc都是上面論點(diǎn)中abc的具體體現(xiàn)
a: live alone = a young adult who lives alone ( 將人物具體化)
b: independent=learn to cook, clean, pay bills and mange budget ( 將獨(dú)立做的事情具體化)
這樣解釋以后，你有沒有對” logical way” 有了更“具體” 的認(rèn)識?
所以， 你現(xiàn)在知道為什么簡單的背誦范文不能提高寫作了嗎?
原因： 我們都不是native speaker
1. native speaker 本來就比我們更懂得怎樣organise ideas logically ,
然而東方人本來就不習(xí)慣“邏輯思維”
所謂邏輯就是把事物的因果關(guān)系，按照時(shí)間的先后順序排列
2. native speaker 是不需要花時(shí)間背誦詞組的。
所以，你們會發(fā)現(xiàn)，Simon的每一個(gè)文章，都用了不一樣的詞組，雖然寫作風(fēng)格都是很簡潔的，
但是你們根本無法模仿。因?yàn)�，你們沒有“ 料” 。
非 Native speaker 是很容易模仿的，但是我們需要的是“ 詞組” 需要的是明確的“邏輯”
怎樣克服這個(gè)困難?
你們需要像我上面一樣的去分析Simon 的滿分范文，
問自己“ What does “ logical way” “ look like in this essay.
這樣我們才可以更有效的模仿
學(xué)習(xí)范文的另外一個(gè)問題是，
Simon 不會告訴你Step by Step 的復(fù)習(xí)方法，
所以我們只知道一個(gè)9分作文的成品,
不知道怎樣模仿，才可以做到寫出一樣的文章。
總結(jié)，模仿，邏輯，詞組，這是就是一個(gè)自學(xué)的烤鴨能最大化利用simon滿分作文的正確方法。祝脫離雅思寫作低分泥沼。
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