【范文】TPO 34獨立寫作解析

TPO 34獨立寫作題目：
　　Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
　　Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
　　Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

思路：同意
　　(1) 過渡依賴虛擬世界讓孩子變的孤僻，不和家人朋友接觸，無法適應(yīng)現(xiàn)實社會。
　　(2) 沉溺于網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲讓學生放棄其他興趣，對身體健康有害。
　　(3) 社交網(wǎng)站讓孩子學到很多不應(yīng)當學得東西。
　　(4) 教師難以讓學生專心聽課，影響學習成績。
　　(5) 孩子在物質(zhì)追求上易形成攀比，增大父母的開銷。

不同意：
　　(1) 在學習方面，學生能夠可以通過高科技學習到更多的信息，并且學得更快。
　　(2) 情感上，父母可以有更多途徑和孩子有共同話題，接觸孩子內(nèi)心世界，方便深入了解。
　　(3) 日常生活上，父母能夠保證孩子在外出行安全，教會孩子利用高科技保護自己。
　　(4) 個人成長方面，孩子可以通過網(wǎng)絡(luò)釋放學習壓力，緩解不良情緒。

學生作文范例（原稿）
　　It is universally acknowledge that various technologies such as cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site play a more important role on education. In my opinion, I disagree with the statement that nowadays it is more difficult to educate children than in the past because children can take advantage of those high-technologies to enhance their study.
　　First and foremost, compared to the past, at present the cell phone can create a good effect on children’s study. For instance, in the past, children learned the new words by the text book without audio format, which led to the children couldn’t speak the words with correct pronunciations; while today, children can study those new words by the cell phone and they can imitate the native speaker’s voice through the audio format in the cell phone. As a result, more and more children can speak English fluently. From this fact, we can learn that the cell phone makes educating children much easier than before.

Furthermore, teaching children is easier than before by the way of playing online games which can cultivate children’s ability of cooperation. Take for example, children had few opportunities to practice the ability of cooperation before. Nevertheless, it is much easier today. In an online game, children are assigned to different tasks, only they cooperate well, can they get final success. From this experience, children can have a sense of teamwork, which cannot learn from the class. This example tells us in the modern society, children have kinds of chances to practice their cooperation’s ability, which is better for their education.

Finally, contract to the past, today social networking can expend children’s horizon, which is also beneficial for their education. For example, ten years ago, with limited technology, only travel can children learn different cultures and languages, however, it spent more money and more time; what’s more, children were too young to go for a trip by themselves. So it was not easy to come true. But today, children just need to sit in front of the computer and type some key words through Google, and then they can get plenty of information as they want immediately. Children can learn other countries’ culture and languages by watching the video online. Consequently, we can realize that social network Web site is a useful way to educate children.

In a nutshell, I strongly disagree with the statement. With the advanced technology like cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site, it can facilitate children’s education and help them be successful easier in their future.

修改稿：
　　It is universally acknowledged that various technologies such as cell phone, online games, and social networking Web sites play a more important role on in education than before. In my opinion, I disagree with the statement that nowadays it is more difficult to educate children than in the past because children can take advantage of those high-technologies to enhance their study.

First and foremost, compared to in the past, at present the cell phone can is enabled to create a good positive effect on children’s study. (觀點清晰)需要補充1-2句論據(jù) Thanks to various of advanced software on the cell phone, student find it not difficult to grasp the most scientific leaning methods. For instance, in the past, children learned the new words by the text book without audio format, which led to the children couldn’t speak the words with correct pronunciations children’s false pronunciations or even mute English ; while today, children can are allowed to study those new words by the cell phone and they can imitate the native speaker’s voice through the audio format in the cell phone. As a result, more and more children can speak English fluently.(舉例恰當) From this fact, we can learn that the cell phone makes educating children much easier and comprehensive than before.

Furthermore, teaching children is easier than before by the way of the obvious benefit that playing online games which can cultivate children’s ability of cooperation cannot be ignored. (觀點清晰) 需要補充1-2句論據(jù)Through competing and interacting with others in the online games which can be called as a miniature of society, children can experience a sense of cooperation and responsibility intangibly. For example, due to the limitation of real situation, children had few opportunities to practice the ability of cooperation before. Nevertheless, it is much easier today, since in an online game, children are assigned to different tasks. Only when they cooperate well, can they get final success.(舉例恰當，欠詳細) From this experience, children can have a sense of teamwork, which cannot be learned from the class. This example tells us Obviously，in the modern society, children have kinds of chances to practice their cooperation’s ability as a result of internet , which is better for their education.

Finally, contract to the past, today social networking can expend children’s horizon, which is also beneficial for their education.(觀點清晰)various information filling in the web provides children with more broaden world without stepping outside. 需要補充1-2句論據(jù)For example, ten years ago, with limited technology, only through travel can children learn different cultures and languages. However, it spent cost more money and more time; what’s more, children were too young to go for a trip by themselves. So it was not easy to come true. But today, children just need to sit in front of the computer and type some key words through Google, and then they can get plenty of information as they want immediately. (例子選的好)In addition, Children can learn other countries’ culture and languages by watching the video online. Consequently, we can realize that social network Web site is a useful way to educate children. (論述清晰,分析很好)

In a nutshell, I strongly disagree with the statement. With the advanced technology like cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site it can facilitate children’s education and help them be successful easier more easily in their future.(扣題嚴謹)

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