雅思寫(xiě)作環(huán)境類滿分范文解析

雅思寫(xiě)作題材范圍廣泛，包括科技類，媒體類，社會(huì)類等。今天我們主要來(lái)學(xué)習(xí)一下環(huán)境類高分范文是如何寫(xiě)作的。話不多說(shuō)，就跟著新通教育的老師來(lái)了解雅思寫(xiě)作環(huán)境類滿分范文解析吧。首先我們簡(jiǎn)單介紹一下環(huán)境類的話題：
環(huán)境類的雅思寫(xiě)作話題是所有話題類型中很熱門(mén)的一個(gè)話題，每年必考，也是雅思作文必練題型，一般包括，新舊能源，個(gè)人能否解決環(huán)境問(wèn)題，政府和大公司誰(shuí)該為環(huán)境問(wèn)題負(fù)責(zé)等。
 最常見(jiàn)的話題類型有三種：
1. 環(huán)境問(wèn)題原因，解決方案
2. 動(dòng)物保護(hù)
3. 國(guó)際社會(huì)，政府和私人對(duì)于環(huán)境問(wèn)題的責(zé)任
要評(píng)價(jià)一篇文章的優(yōu)劣勢(shì)，首先還是讓我們熟悉一下Writing Task 2即大作文的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)。
Task response (TR)
Whether all parts of the task are addressed
Whether a viewpoint is clearly expressed, developed and supported.
Cohesion and coherence (CC)
Whether the response has a suitable layout and logical ordering of points
(文章是否條理清晰，行文有邏輯)
Correct and appropriate use of connectives (是否正確使用銜接詞)
Lexical resources (LR)
Range and accuracy of vocabulary (詞匯豐富度和準(zhǔn)確度)
The correct form and spelling of the words (詞匯形式和拼寫(xiě)正確)
Grammatical range and accuracy (GRA)
The range and accuracy of tenses and sentence structure (時(shí)態(tài)和句式的豐富度和準(zhǔn)確度)
接下來(lái)，我們還是以一篇滿分范文為例，看看具體怎么好在哪里，為什么會(huì)拿到了滿分，我們能學(xué)到哪些知識(shí)，技巧。
 題目：
Trying to save endangered animals species from extinction is a waste of valuable recourses. Do you agree or disagree?Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
 范文：
The issue of whether we should attempt to save endangered species from extinction or not is certainly a contentious one. Despite the arguments of some people that such animals serve no useful purpose and should be allowed to die out just as many others (including the dinosaurs) have in the past, it is my personal belief that they should in fact be preserved. Two of the principal reasons for this are as follows.
Firstly, it is vital that we appreciate the importance of endangered species in maintaining the balance of nature. Ecosystems are delicate arrangements where plants and animals all depend on each other for survival. The disappearance or introduction of any animal species disrupts the balance and negatively impacts upon other plants and animals by breaking the food chain and altering the habitat in which they live. Such imbalances frequently return to haunt us in unexpected ways. Just as rabbits that were introduced to Australia soon after European settlement now compete with native species for food and destroy farmers’ crops, the extinction of a predator can cause plagues by allowing its prey to multiply unchecked. Therefore, since ecological change constitutes a potential risk to us and our environment, it is clearly in our own interests to protect endangered species.
Yet, perhaps the strongest argument in favor of preserving endangered species is that all life has intrinsic values; even if endangered species are not useful to us in any practical way they should be preserved nevertheless. Further, given that we humans are responsible for destroying the natural habitat of many endangered animals, we should make every possible effort to save them.
In conclusion, I once again restate my view that saving endangered species is worthwhile. Not only do they help to maintain the balance of nature, but they also have value in and of themselves.
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Task response(TR)
首先我們先從TR方面分析一下
Whether all parts of the task are addressed
(是否解決任務(wù)的所有部分)
經(jīng)過(guò)審題我們發(fā)現(xiàn)這是一個(gè)個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)類的作文，即What are your opinions on this? 給出你自己的觀點(diǎn)，其要求是Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience，根據(jù)自己的知識(shí)或經(jīng)驗(yàn)給出相關(guān)的例子。其中如果用自己的知識(shí)論證那就是道理論證，如果根據(jù)自己的經(jīng)驗(yàn)來(lái)論證那就涉及到了舉例論證。
文章首段第一句就拋出了一個(gè)問(wèn)題，是否應(yīng)該拯救瀕危動(dòng)物，并且讓步指出了別人的觀點(diǎn)，之后給出自己的觀點(diǎn)，即it is my personal belief that they should in fact be preserved.個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)是應(yīng)該保護(hù)瀕危動(dòng)物的，并且埋下伏筆兩個(gè)原因如下。接下來(lái)的兩個(gè)主體段給出了作者自己的論點(diǎn)以及論據(jù)，最后總結(jié)段簡(jiǎn)短有力。 這篇文章還是完成了題目要求的所有內(nèi)容的。
Whether a viewpoint is clearly expressed, developed and supported
其次我們?cè)诳纯醋髡弑磉_(dá)的觀點(diǎn)是否清晰，有說(shuō)服力
文章的第一個(gè)論點(diǎn)Firstly, it is vital that we appreciate the importance of endangered species in maintaining the balance of nature. 首先,至關(guān)重要的是,我們能夠認(rèn)識(shí)到瀕危物種在維護(hù)大自然的平衡的重要性。接下來(lái)作者先用到了道理論證，有力的說(shuō)明了生態(tài)系統(tǒng)是脆弱的，很容易被破壞的， 以及生態(tài)系統(tǒng)不平衡之后會(huì)產(chǎn)生的嚴(yán)重后果。隨后作者又運(yùn)用了舉例論證，以澳大利亞引進(jìn)歐洲兔子為例，兔子引進(jìn)之后沒(méi)有天敵，導(dǎo)致了生態(tài)平衡的破壞。所以我 們的目標(biāo)就是保護(hù)瀕臨動(dòng)物以及生態(tài)系統(tǒng)。
Yet, perhaps the strongest argument in favor of preserving endangered species is that all life has intrinsic values文章的第二個(gè)論點(diǎn)：然而,也許最有力的論據(jù)支持保護(hù)瀕危物種是所有生命內(nèi)在的價(jià)值觀。接下來(lái)作者用了一個(gè)讓步的寫(xiě)法，盡管瀕危動(dòng)物對(duì)我們來(lái)說(shuō) 并沒(méi)有實(shí)際的用處，但是人類還是有責(zé)任來(lái)保護(hù)我們破壞的自熱環(huán)境以及瀕危動(dòng)物。
作者運(yùn)用了舉例論證和道理相結(jié)合還有讓步的手法，使文章有理有據(jù)，很有說(shuō)服力。
那下面我們一起看一下文章在連貫和銜接方面有什么值得借鑒的吧。

Cohesion and coherence (CC)首先講一下寫(xiě)作中使用連接詞有什么作用：
1. 使得文章框架明晰，邏輯結(jié)構(gòu)合理。
2. 起到承上啟下，語(yǔ)篇連貫自然的作用。
3. 使得文章層次分明，結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)。
文章中句與句直接的銜接詞有：despite(盡管 表讓步)，therefore(因此 表結(jié)果)，even if(即使 表讓步)，further(此外 表進(jìn)一步說(shuō)明)，not only…but also(不僅…而且 表示強(qiáng)調(diào))等等。這些單詞在文章段落中表示著一定的邏輯關(guān)系，這些詞的實(shí)用會(huì)使段落直接更加的順暢自然。
段與段之間的連接詞有Two of the principal reasons for this are as follows. Firstly, it is vital that we appreciate the …第一句話是首段的結(jié)尾句，兩個(gè)原因如下，而第二句是主體段的開(kāi)頭第一個(gè)原因是…很好的做到了承上啟下的作用。In conclusion總之，也是段與段之間的一個(gè)連接詞組，讓讀者清晰明白到這是總結(jié)段。

Lexical resources (LR)這篇文章在詞匯方面也有很多可圈可點(diǎn)之處：
Contentious 有爭(zhēng)議的
Principal reasons 首要的原因
Die out 滅絕
Preserved 被保護(hù)
Ecosystems 生態(tài)系統(tǒng)
delicate 脆弱的
disrupts 使紊亂
imbalances 不平衡
haunt us 困擾著我們
in unexpected ways 出乎意料的方式
extinction of a predator 捕食者滅絕
plagues 瘟疫
multiply unchecked 不加抑制的繁殖
ecological change 生態(tài)變化
constitutes 構(gòu)成
a potential risk 潛在的風(fēng)險(xiǎn)
endangered species 瀕危物種
strongest argument 最有力的論證
in favor of 支持
preserving endangered species 保護(hù)瀕危物種
intrinsic values 內(nèi)在價(jià)值
natural habitat 自然棲息地
make every possible effort to 盡一切可能的努力
restate my view 重申我的觀點(diǎn)
worthwhile 值得做的
maintain the balance of 保持…的平衡
這些都是文章中運(yùn)用的非常棒的單詞，值得我們背下來(lái)并且運(yùn)用到自己的寫(xiě)作中。
Grammatical range and accuracy (GRA)
語(yǔ)法的正確復(fù)雜，句式的多樣也是評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)的一個(gè)很重要的方面。文章的開(kāi)頭句The issue of whether we should attempt to save endangered species from extinction or not is certainly a contentious one.就用到了一個(gè)主語(yǔ)從句，充分顯示了作者扎實(shí)的語(yǔ)法功底。it is my personal belief that…涉及到了強(qiáng)調(diào)句式，第二段的開(kāi)頭it is vital that we appreciate…為了避免頭重腳輕用到了形式主語(yǔ)。通過(guò)對(duì)這篇滿分環(huán)境類范文的分析，我們可以知道，想要寫(xiě)好一篇分?jǐn)?shù)很高的文章應(yīng)該做到以下幾點(diǎn)：
1，審清題目，明白題目的要求，完成題目所給任務(wù)
2，論點(diǎn)要有理有據(jù)，可以使用道理論證和舉例論證相結(jié)合
3，多使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，是文章更加流暢自然
4，注意詞匯的使用，盡量高級(jí)有深度
5，語(yǔ)法要避免單一以及大量簡(jiǎn)單句，盡量使句式的多樣化
以上就是雅思寫(xiě)作環(huán)境類滿分范文解析的詳細(xì)內(nèi)容，考生在平時(shí)還是要多加練習(xí)，不斷改進(jìn)。希望考生取得滿意的雅思成績(jī)，更多雅思備考經(jīng)驗(yàn)我們將會(huì)陸續(xù)為大家更新。