雅思寫作中常出現(xiàn)的語意問題

學(xué)生說橫看豎看這句子都是對的？元芳，你腫么看喂？
1. As can be seen, the change of the percentage of the Sweden and USA have a slight increase from 1940 to 1995.
2. The main fuel resource, 50 units of electricity was produced by coal.
3. Compared with Brazil, the water consumption per person of Congo is 8km3.
4. They are not old enough to distinguish what are the good things and tell the bad things.
5. This because, although, lots of parents could not provide enough knowledge for their children even they graduated from a famous college.
6. Although we are living in an era of information, we can receive a lot of interesting news, ideas and messages.
7. Cellphone is multi-functional and we can take a good advantage of it.
8. With the development of society, we should find a new way to teach children and help them a lot. 

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修改后：
1. The change of 去掉。As can be seen, Sweden as well as USA has a slight increase in percentage of population over 65 years old from 1940 to 1995.
2. 同位語放在一起。The main fuel resource, coal generated 50 units of electricity.
3. 比較對象要一致。Compared with the water consumption per person of Brazil, Congo’s is 8km3.
4. And產(chǎn)生歧義且句子不簡潔。它并列的是distinguish和tell這兩個動詞還是what后的句子呢？改后為：They are not old enough to distinguish the good from the bad.
5. 突然靈感來了，單詞就Duang~~Duang亂入了。改為Although lots of parents graduated from famous colleges, they could not provide enough knowledge for their children.
6. 生活在信息時代和接收大量信息，這兩者之間是沒有轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的。Since we are living in an era of information, we can receive a lot of interesting news, ideas and messages.
7. 兩個句子之間是有明顯邏輯關(guān)系的。原句語法上沒有問題，但如果用連詞體現(xiàn)句內(nèi)關(guān)系就更好了。Cellphone is multi-functional, so we can take good advantage of it.
8. With the development of society和什么都有關(guān)系嗎？這里的模糊聯(lián)系給人的感覺好牽強，不要鬧，萬能理由真不是這么用的。還有什么叫help them a lot？how？how much？

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