托福作文開頭怎么寫？

很多考生在第一段就出現(xiàn)錯(cuò)誤，甚至歪曲了原題目的意思，整篇圍繞一個(gè)錯(cuò)誤的觀點(diǎn)展開。這樣的獨(dú)立寫作，當(dāng)然不能得高分。所以說托福作文開頭是寫作部分高分與否的關(guān)鍵。

我們寫作最重要的一步就是審題，因?yàn)閷忣}關(guān)系到整個(gè)文章思路的確定，而審題準(zhǔn)確有否最直接的體現(xiàn)就是文章的開篇段。

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一般來說，開篇段落的寫作可分為兩大步驟：

第一步就是用簡潔明了的句子對(duì)原題目的意思進(jìn)行同義替換;

第二步是提出自己的觀點(diǎn)。

這兩大步驟細(xì)化起來可以概括為四句話：

第一句，采用同義替換的方式對(duì)原題目的意思進(jìn)行更改，當(dāng)然是“形變神不變”;

第二句，對(duì)題目的意思進(jìn)行解釋

第三句，提出自己的觀點(diǎn);

第四句，概括自己所提出觀點(diǎn)的理由，引起下文。

下面我具體用一些客戶常犯的毛病題目來解釋這個(gè)“兩大步，四個(gè)句子”的具體運(yùn)用方法。

案例1：誤解原意思

Do you agree or disagree: Because people are busy with doing so many things, they can do few things well?

Original：

Some people may hold the view that they are able to do things well even if they are busy with doing so many things simultaneously or during a given period. Although plausible at the first glance, I disagree with the statement. Depending on my own personal experience and personality, I firmly maintain that people can do few things well when they are busy with doing so many things. My arguments of this opinion are listed as follows.

解析：

文章第一句話不是對(duì)原題目意思進(jìn)行解釋，而是采用采取了和原意思相反的做法來進(jìn)行題目詮釋;第二句表明自己對(duì)誤解題目的觀點(diǎn);第三句話對(duì)自己的觀點(diǎn)進(jìn)行近一步的解釋;第四句一個(gè)過渡性的句子。開篇內(nèi)容安排倒是很好，但是作者犯了誤解原題目意思的錯(cuò)誤導(dǎo)致后面整個(gè)文字都做了無用功。

改后：

When people are engaged in a large extent of work simultaneously, they will not be able to perform all of them perfectly. Just imagine how terrible it will be: too many jobs need to be done by the same person in a given time. Once such a picture appears in my mind, I feel dizzy. To me, it is impossible to do everything well with the limited energy and many others factors .Therefore , I agree with the statement too many things to be done at the same time cause few to be well done . The reasons are as follow.

Revised：

第一句話對(duì)原題目意思進(jìn)行了很好的詮釋;第二、三句話進(jìn)一步解釋原題目;第四句話提出自己的觀點(diǎn);第五句話過渡性句子引起下文。

案例2 ：語言羅嗦，繞彎子給出自己觀點(diǎn)，浪費(fèi)時(shí)間

Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

original：

With the development of science and technology, people’s living standard has been improving day by day. According to the family plan, one couple could have only one child. So child becomes the center of the whole family. Some of them are even spoiled. Therefore, I think it is better if the young adult could live independent from their parents as soon as possible.

解析：

這個(gè)開頭看似沒有任何問題，但是仔細(xì)分析就會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)很多問題。首先，作者繞了個(gè)大彎才給出自己的觀點(diǎn)。其次，觀點(diǎn)是對(duì)原題目的抄寫，改動(dòng)的比較少。最后，開篇缺少引起下文的過渡句。更大的錯(cuò)誤是這個(gè)開頭更像是一個(gè)全文主要觀點(diǎn)的一個(gè)分論點(diǎn)。

Revised:

As we all know, some young adults have the sense of independence in a special period so that they want to choose to live apart from their family, while others still choose to stay with parents in the family. Family can provide young adults a warm bay where he or she could turn to whenever any problems arise. However, considering the sound development of the young adult both mentally and physically, I think to live independently the earlier, the better. Independence is a lesson that each of us must face one day. The detailed reasons are listed below.

解析：

第一句話詮釋原題目意思;第二句話進(jìn)一步解釋第一句話;第三句話提出自己的觀點(diǎn);第四句話解釋自己的觀點(diǎn)，引出下文。

通過這幾個(gè)例子我們不難看出，托福作文開頭其實(shí)并不難寫。只要掌握規(guī)律就好！

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